tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2663505740390806207.post5176902966595267356..comments2023-10-18T10:35:45.775-04:00Comments on MissAdventure: The Right BeginningKate Ahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11742061849904519583noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2663505740390806207.post-46660770432228913822010-06-27T21:38:39.375-04:002010-06-27T21:38:39.375-04:00I think your critique partner was right. It's ...I think your critique partner was right. It's a lovely scene and all but it isn't a good opener for your book. You can get away with this level of characterisation and description later on, when we are already invested in your story. <br /><br />The main problem is that nothing really happens. I agree with above, that things start getting interesting with the introduction of Rosemary.<br /><br />I understand exactly where you are coming from with this - I cut most of my first chapter when I re-wrote my novel, and while it was painful it was necessary. <br /><br />Good luck!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2663505740390806207.post-16374547905247395282010-05-07T00:19:30.776-04:002010-05-07T00:19:30.776-04:00As someone who is totally e-literate when it comes...As someone who is totally e-literate when it comes to writing I looooove the beginning, you can almost smell the teen anxt in the air. Spencer is right up my alley and I know he is prob written just for me and my hobby of collecting BDAs ;)<br /> I think the juice begins with the introduction of Rosemary. I think its important to set the stasis of the world you are introducing the reader into, and in my (un-edumacated) opinion I wouldnt rush into the meat of the story too fast.lohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02603219718647934731noreply@blogger.com